初中英语优秀作文评析一

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优秀作文评析（二）——应用文 1

【习作要求】
　　假如你的名字叫王磊，你有一位美国朋友杰克(Jack)今年暑假要到西安来参观，你写信告诉他，你住在西安市南大街65号，从火车站乘10路公共汽车到历史博物馆下车。到时你将在车站等他。此信写于2004年5月1日。

　　注意：
　　(1) 数不得少于50个。　
　　(2) 求意思完整，语句连贯。

　　【参考范文】

Xi'an, China
May 1st, 2004

Dear Jack:
　　I'm very glad to hear that you'll come to visit Xi'an this summer holiday. Now I would like to tell you how to get to my house. I live at 65 the South Street, Xi'an. When you arrive in Xi'an by train (or by plane), you can catch (take) the No. 10 bus and get off at the History Museum. I'll wait for you there.

Yours,
Wang Lei

　　【名师点评】
　　完成这道书面表达题应从以下几个方面着手考虑：
　　首先，这道题属于书信文件，所以应注意书信的正确格式。其次从提示的内容来看，主要是说王磊的一位美国朋友杰克于暑假要来西安参观，王磊写信告诉他行走的路线及到时在车站等他等细节，应采用一般现在时和将来时态来叙述。最后，同学们应结合所给的主要内容，用所学过的词（组）及句型来完成此文。路客英语资源网 http://www.luke555.com

　　参观 visit 　　今年暑假 this summer holiday　　想要 would like to do

　　到达 get to/arrive at/reach 　　乘坐公共汽车 catch/take a bus　　下车 get off 等等。

优秀作文评析（二）——应用文 2

【习作要求】
　　假如你叫Han Meimei，你的笔友Mary现在上海三中学习。她邀请你去参加聚会。请你用英语给Mary写一封信。信的要点如下：
　　(1) 你很抱歉，不能去。
　　(2) 你母亲病了，医生叫她卧床几日。你要照料母亲。
　　(3) 谢谢寄来的漂亮的明信片(postcard)，很喜欢，将放在书桌上。

　　注意：
　　(1) 信要通顺、连贯。
　　(2) 词数60字左右。信的开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。
　　(3) 如写不下，可写在横线下空白处。

No.3 Middle School
Shanghai
April 20, 2004

Dear Mary,
　　Thank you very much for inviting (邀请) me to your party. ________________
__
　　Give my best wishes to your family.

Yours,
Han Meimei

　　【参考范文】

No.3 Middle School
Shanghai
April 20, 2004

Dear Mary,
　　Thank you very much for inviting me to your party. I am very sorry, but I can’t come. My mother is ill. The doctor has told her that she should stay in bed for several days. I’ll take care of my mother. Thank you very much for sending me such a beautiful postcard. I like it very much. I am going to put it on my desk.
　　Could I hear from you soon?
　　Give my best wishes to your family.

Yours,
Han Meimei

　　【名师点评】
　　利用所学英语知识和题目所给材料写一封英文信。通读全文，可较详细地列出要点：
　　(1) 你很抱歉，不能去
　　(2) 原因是母亲生病了
　　(3) 医生嘱其卧床几日
　　(4) 你必须照料母亲
　　(5) 谢谢寄来的明信片，很喜欢
　　(6) 明信片放在桌上

　　要注意的是：内容要点不遗漏；时态、语态正确；句子结构正确；符合英文信的格式；单词拼写正确；语句通顺，上下文连贯；字数在60左右。

　　通过以上分析，再着手开始写，一定会写出一封符合题意要求的英文信来。

优秀作文评析（二）——应用文 3

【习作要求】
　　Miss Jo Hunt和Lily是好朋友。Lily给Jo写信，告诉她自己和双胞胎妹妹在中国学习和生活的情况，并询问对方的汉语学习情况及是否能来中国。路客英语资源网

　　要求：写一篇100词左右的信。

　　【学生习作】

March 5th，2004

Dear Jo:
　　How are you? I haven’t heard of ① you for a long time.

　　I’d like tell ② you something about our school life in China. Now we are students of No.4 Middle School. We’re in the same grade, Grade Two, but in different class ③. I’m in Class 1, but Lucy is in Class 4. We go to school five days a week. Every morning, we leave home after a quick breakfast. Classes begin at eight o’clock in the morning. We have four classes in the morning and three classes in the afternoon. We have lunch at school because we all ④ like Chinese food very much.

　　Our favorite food is dumplings. School is over at about 3 in the afternoon. After school we have sports on the playground. We have made friends with a lot of Chinese children. We teach them English and they teach our ⑤ Chinese. Now we can speak and write a little in Chinese. What about you? By the way, when are you coming to China? Please write to me soon.

Love from: Lily

①from，“收到某人的信”应为hear from。

②to tell，正确的说法是“would like sb. to do sth.”

③classes，既然在不同班级，应该用复数形式。

④both，all表示三者以上的人或物，both表示二者。

⑤us，此处应用宾格形式。

　　【名师点评】
　　本文从句子结构到语言能力的表达都很不错。思路清晰，行文流畅。正确地运用了动词时态，但是大小写及动词搭配还要多加练习。

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