中考英语作文题型分析与例文评析

　　[例1]To be a lovely Shanghainese(上海市英语中考题)

　　审题：该题的重点在于阐述作为一个可爱的上海人，我们关键应怎样做?在2003年的考生作文中，有一部分同学发生了严重的偏题，把描述重点放在形容上海是怎样的一个大都市，因此失分很多。由此看来，审题的准确是非常重要的。

　　学生作文：Shanghai is developing quickly everyday. Quite a few foreigners come to visit Shanghai. As the hosts of Shanghai, we must be lovely Shanghaineses to tell the visitors that Shanghai is an international city. To be a lovely Shanghainese, first, we should do our best to make the city more beautiful to show our enthusiasm. Next, we should be kind and friendly to everyone. We must do so to make our guests fell our zeal. Finally, we should study and work hard to rise our ability. Shanghai is developing and we should make progress to follow the epoch.

　　教师评析：该篇作文行文流畅，结构清晰，以“first，Next，Finally”的结构描述，层次感很强。不定式的恰当运用体现了考生较好的语法功底。

　　教师拟评分：9分

　　[例2]Four years' school life

　　审题：该题要求考生对四年的初中生活进行回顾和总结，适合以夹叙夹议的方式来写作。(此外，从情感教育的角度来看，阅卷老师总希望读到考生回忆自己美好、快乐的初中生活，而不是讨厌自己的母校、老师、同学等消极情绪的体现。)

　　学生作文：I've been in my middle school for four years. Four years' school life plays an important role in my life. I enjoy making friends, getting knowledge and having interesting time in my school. I have also made friendship with lots of classmates, and I have also been taught different lessons by lots of different patient teachers. I have grown up a lot in the past four years. I will never forget my four years' school life.

　　教师评析：整篇作文非常明快、流畅，体现了考生对母校依依不舍的情怀。由于是对初中生活的回顾和总结，考生恰当地选择以现在完成时作为主要的时态来强调影响和结果,文中'plays an important role'这一词组和被动语态的正确运用也体现了考生良好的词汇和语法功底。

　　教师拟评分：10分

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